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Many languages are dying out every year. Some people think that our lives will be simpler with fewer language. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Currently, with the development of globalization,some lesser-known languages become dying out every year.Some people feel that this trend will make our lives more simpler than that before.Personally,I can hardly agree with them. Language is one of the essential factors of culture, we should exert our utmost effort to protect them.

Admittedly, haveing a global language will benefit the communication in contemporary world,especially with the sweeping trend of international trade.In addition, it is easy to visit foreign countrythus a lingua franca is becoming increasingly important to enhance international tourism. Take English as an example, the widespread usage of English is one of the driving forces to the international cooperation in amounts of areas. Having said that, language is a reflection of human civilization,how to protect it should be put on the top of the list.

Different languages reflecte different cultures.That is to say,a vanished of a language means a lost of a culture.First of all,human culture traditions need to be handed down from one generation to the next by varies languages.Particularly some minority's traditional only carried by oral,like some special technologies in China.Secondly,according to a latest survey,learning a foreign language can produces physiological change in our brains,which plays a crucial role in the improvement of human intelligence.Finally,varies languages provides varies ways to see the world.That is to say, because of learning other language,there are more possibilities in our future.For instance,studying or working overseas.

In conclusion,despite the fact that an international language will brings more convenient to modern lives, but how to protect the culture identity should be took into consideration by the governments. As far as I concerned, we should make some steps to save the lesser-known languages from extinction.

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Many languages are dying out every year. Some people think that our lives will be simpler with fewer language. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Currently, with the development of globalization, some lesser-known languages become are dying out every year. Some people feel that this trend will make our lives more simpler than that before. Personally, I can hardly agree with them. Languages is are one of the essential factors of culture, and we should exert our utmost efforts to protect them.

{It would be simpler if all people spoke the same language. The fact that language is an important part of a culture is not related to the truth that having a universal language would be easier for all people}

Admittedly, haveing having a global language will would benefit the communication in the contemporary world, especially with the sweeping trend of international trade. In addition, it is easy to visit a foreign country, thus, a lingua franca is becoming increasingly important to enhance international tourism. Take English as an example, the widespread usage of English is one of the driving forces to the of international cooperation in amounts of areas. Having said that, languages is are a reflection of human civilization, and how to protect it them should be put on the top of the list.

{You say that protection of a language should be on the top of the list - what list?}

Different languages reflecte reflect different cultures. That is to say, a vanished of a language means a lost loss of a culture. First of all, human culture cultural traditions need to be handed down from one generation to the next by varies various languages. Particularly, some minority's traditional traditions of minorities are only carried by oral conveyed orally, like some special technologies in China. Secondly, according to a latest survey, learning a foreign language can produces physiological changes in our brains, which plays a crucial role in the improvement of human intelligence. Finally, varies knowing differentlanguages provides varies one with various ways to see understand the world. That is to say, because of learning other languages, there are more possibilities in our future; Ffor instance, studying or working overseas.

{Are you saying that some special technologies can only be understood or taught in Chinese? If you are going to mention surveys as source material, you should include basic information on the survey - who did the work, when it was done, etc.}

In conclusion, despite the fact that an international language will brings would be more convenient to modern lives, but how to protect the the protection of cultural identities culture identity should be took taken into consideration by the governments. As far as I am concerned, we should make take some steps to save the lesser-known languages from extinction.
{Why do you say that the protection of a cultural identity is a function of a government?}

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