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[lindalinda1228]

NATIVE DISRUPTIVE BY EUROPEAN

The profitability of fur the fur trade brought more and more settlers and trappers to Canada from the
European countries. The fur trade was an incentive for expanding European claims over native lands, a way to extend dominance over the native, and the attempts of the Roman Catholic Church to convert the natives to Christianity. Those were major disruption for native society.

Land was cleared for settlements and the supply of fur bearing animals was threatened. As a result, the harvesting of fur bearing animals through hunting and trapping created decline in the animal population. The fur trade brought Indians useful items, such as tools, blankets and manufactured goods, but also made them suffering through the introduction of disease, firearms, loss of culture, and loss of territory. For instance, an economic historian Harold Innis argued that fur trade gave Canada its present boundaries in searching of fur especially beaver.

[Gillnetter]

NATIVE DISRUPTIVE BY EUROPEAN

The profitability of fur the fur trade brought more and more settlers and trappers to Canada from the
European countries. The fur trade was an incentive for expanding European claims over native lands. It was a way to extend dominance over the natives, and the attempts of for the Roman Catholic Church to convert the natives to Christianity. Those were major disruptions for native society.

{You might want to consider cause and effect here. The way this is written makes one think that the Europeans were looking for a reason to come to what would become Canada and exploit the natives. The Europeans came because there was money to be made - that the natives were exploited was an effect of the Europeans' coming to the New World}


Land was cleared for settlements and the supply of fur bearing animals was threatened. As a result, the harvesting of fur bearing animals, through hunting and trapping, created a decline in the animal population. The fur trade brought Indians useful items, such as tools, blankets and manufactured goods,. but It also made them caused suffering through the introduction of disease, firearms, loss of culture, and loss of territory. For instance, an economic historian, Harold Innis, argued that the fur trade gave Canada its' present boundaries in searching of the search for fur, especially beaver.

Here is some basic editing for you to consider.