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hello, im doing an essay that has to be less than 250 words, i want to know if u guys could check it, thanks

what will my collage degree will say about me?
My college degree will say that I am a person who does not give up easily and that is responsible. I like challenges, so that is why I am taking two AP classes and one honor class in high school. Since I was little, I always liked computers. When I was a junior in high school, I took a computer science class. At first it was hard, but then it became fun because of the way programs work so now my goal is to get a degree on computer science. I know that earning a degree in that field is challenging because it involves advance math, but I know that with my determination, I will be able to achieve my goal.
I am a first generation college student. My parents will be very happy and proud because I will get my collegedegree. I know that it will mean a lot to them and could also help them to have a better lifestyle.

[Gillnetter]

hello, im doing an essay that has to be less than 250 words, i want to know if u guys could check it, thanks
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what will my collage college degree will say about me?
My college degree will say that I am a person who does not give up easily and that is responsible. I like challenges, so that is why I am taking two AP {Spell out the word }classes and one honors class in high school. Since I was little, I always liked computers. When I was a junior in high school, I took a computer science class. At first it was hard {steel is hard, science is difficult}, but then it became fun because of the way programs work. so now My goal is to get a degree on in computer science. I know that earning a degree in that field is challenging because it involves advanced mathematics, but I know that, with my determination, I will be able to achieve my goal.

I am a first generation college student {Possible rewording - I am the first in my family to go to college. A first generation college student doesn't make sense}. My parents will be very happy and proud because I will get my college degree. I know that it will mean a lot to them and could also help them to have a better lifestyle.

Using English correctly is similar to writing computer code - both require attention to detail. Your essay is fine but it could be excellent.