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[prabakar]

Dear Bruno,

How are you ?. I hope you are fine. I met Sivakumar.P(satti) couple of months back and
started talking about our school days. I heard from him that you are working in Satyam Computers .

A short story about me after 10th std from Vivekananda School I joined +2 for MHSS and after MHSS I completed my Business Management in PSG Arts college, coimbatore. After college I wrote Chartered Accountant exams and I cannot get through. Soon with partners I started finance business(Financing for Vehicles) and we have running the business successfully for more than 10 years. In 2003 I married deepika and we have lovely daughter deeksha (3 years) both my daughter and sivakumar’s son are studying in Euro Kids.


Its funny to remind you that we used dance in ground for (silly) song.

Keep in touch with me.

Regards

Kindly give the valuable suggestion for my mail
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[Gillnetter]

Dear Bruno,

How are you ?. I hope you are fine. I met Sivakumar. P(satti) a couple of months back and we started talking about our school days. I heard from him that you are working in at Satyam Computers .

A short story about me, after 10th std {I do not understand "std"}from Vivekananda School I joined +2 {What does +2 mean?}for MHSS and after MHSS I completed my Business Management in at PSG Arts college, coimbatore {If coimbatore is a city, it should be capitalized}. After college I wrote took the Chartered Accountant exams and I cannot could not get through. Soon, with partners, I started a finance business(financing for vehicles) and we have running the business successfully for more than 10 years. In 2003 I married Deepika and we have a lovely daughter Deeksha (3 years); both my daughter and Sivakumar’s son are studying in at Euro Kids.


It's funny to remind you that we used dance in ground for (silly) song.
{How does one dance in ground?}
Keep in touch with me.

Regards

Kindly give the valuable suggestion for my mail
.

You may want to review how "in" and "at" are used in English.

[Tdol]

A short story about me- this suggests that the rest is fiction. I think you could just delete it.

[prabakar]

You may want to review how "in" and "at" are used in English.

Would you explain me where to use "in" and "at" in English

[Ks2010]

i dont understand