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the title of my essay:
Marriage is the best medicine
arecent research it has emerged that a happy marriage is good for your health and can up to someadd years to your life. In this context,Professor Robert Kaplan, who led the research, affirmed that many studies have shown that unmarried adults have a higher probability of early death than those who are married.
Basically, when you are in a relationship there is an element of social connectedness and interaction that prevent the isolation that singles have got. Taking care of someone else and living for another person who loves you
,helps you to live longer. Also these considerations reduce stress and can aid you in dealing better with problems better. People ,who decide dto unite their entire life and creating a union with someone else ,adopt healthier lifestyles; they take a greater interest in each other’s health, contributing to improved wellbeing.
Being themarriage being so healthy, thedivorce is consequently a stressful experience, above all for women, as emerged from the study. As thea matter of fact, women who divorce are 50 per cent more likely to develop heart disease in later life than those who stay married. The underlying reasons could fora marriage break up can cause physical and mental problems are recognized primary into theis the emotional stress with also the subsequentand upheaval of moving house or losing income.
On the contrary, men appear much
morestronger than women. In this context, in the studyIt emerges in the study that they have just little effects on their possibility of developing heart problems.(I am not sure what you mean here -- do you mean "it has only a small effect on..."?) This result has given byis due to the fact that women tend to value and think about themselves more in terms of family relationships, whereas men value themselves first of all in terms of their life’s work.
As the director of Family and Youth Concern, Norman Wells
,suggests that marriage is more than a simple piece of paper and it brings positive benefits to all the wider society, starting from the couples themselves arriving to children(I am not sure what this means).
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