a short article written by me

[tiggerwwc]

Here is a short article written by me.

Could you please help me to check whether there is any grammatical mistake.

And actually I would also like my wording to be more native.

If there is anything so incomprehensible, please tell me. I would try my best to explain.

I would be thankful to every comment you give and humbly learn from them.



The article:
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　　Team-killing is not only a phenomenon happened in the world of FPS games. It is, in fact, everywhere in our reality world.

　　Such statment was proven by a new recruit in the Chinese PLA while he was given training in use of hand grenade. That was always supposed to be safe training in which the soilder needed only to throw a grenade from a blockhouse and the process was all under a trainer's supervision.

　　However, in this time, the new recruit was too nervous and a bit run out of luck. He threw the grenade from a wrong angle that the grenade badly hit the wall of the blockhouse and rebound back to his side.

　　While the whole thing was too sudden for the recruit to react; the trainer was swifly pulled the recruit back behind a solid concrete wall and bended over him on the floor. Miraculously, no one was injured in the accident.

　　"My mind just went blank, except that I thought 'It's over.' " The new recruit said, when being asked about his "almost success in team-killing" .

　　Yet, on the other hand, the life-saving trainer spoke of the accident in a much calm way as if it was his daily job: "As a trainer, I must watch out for everything while the new recruit throwing a grenade. "

　　Perhaps the new recruit should at least treat his life savior a meal as the pay back.



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And the article is all base on a current news.

I post a link here. It may help if you don't understand what I am talking about:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=y-fzKMOBevs

[Gillnetter]

Here is a short article written by me.

Could you please help me to check whether there is any grammatical mistake.

And actually I would also like my wording to be more native.

If there is anything so incomprehensible, please tell me. I would try my best to explain.

I would be thankful to every comment you give and humbly learn from them.



The article:
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　　Team-killing is not only a phenomenon happened that happens in the world of FPS games. It is, in fact, everywhere in our reality world.

　　Such a statment was proven by a new recruit in the Chinese PLA while he was given training in use of hand grenades. That was always supposed to be safe training in which the soilder solider needed only to throw a grenade from a blockhouse and the process was all under a trainer's supervision.

　　However, in this time, the new recruit was too nervous and a bit run ran out of luck. He threw the grenade from a wrong angle that and the grenade badly hit the wall of the blockhouse and rebounded back to his side.

　　While the whole thing was too sudden for the recruit to react; the trainer was swifly pulled the recruit back behind a solid concrete wall and bended bent over him on the floor. Miraculously, no one was injured in the accident.

　　"My mind just went blank, except that I thought 'It's over.' " The new recruit said, when being asked about his "almost near success in team-killing" .

　　Yet, on the other hand, the life-saving trainer spoke of the accident in a much calmer way as if it was his daily job: "As a trainer, I must watch out for everything while when the new recruits throwing a throw grenades. "

　　Perhaps the new recruit should at least treat his life savior a meal as the a pay back.



---------------------------------------------------------


And the article is all base on a current news.

I post a link here. It may help if you don't understand what I am talking about:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=y-fzKMOBevs

Interesting story.