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please check my essay
My topic. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Only people who earn a lot of money are successful.
Nowadays money has become one of most important things in our life. People work earn money and spend this money for paying taxes, for expenses and so on. However it does not mean that money is everything for people. Some people think that money is crucial factor that determines does this person successful or not. Other thinks contrary to them. I strongly believe that money have nothing to do with success. Below I would like to illustrate several reasons and examples to support my point of view.
First and foremost I would like to mention that most important factor that determines success is self satisfaction. People cannot feel themselves successful if they have no satisfaction. Everybody have different ways to reach self satisfaction, some like work and earn a lot of money, other like extreme sport and so on however only people who can find their own path in this life and can reach self satisfaction can be determined as successful people.
Moreover, it is crucial to indicate that people, who could not find happiness in this life, cannot be successful. Main think in our life is happiness, for instance my friend had a work with high payment, he had huge home, his own car, and I thought that he is successful because he got everything that he want. However when I talked with him I understood that he haven’t one important think and this thing was happiness, he had no one to share this huge home with, he had no family, he was spend most of his time in work and only thing that he need at home was bed and so because of this he did not feel him successful, and drop this job soon.
On the other hand, each coin has two sides: its worst to point out that there are some situations where my option does not work. Without money people cannot be successful as well. Nowadays money play main role in our life, in order to survive, we need money. We need money to keep our family and so if we could afford to earn enough money to do all of this we will be able to count ourselves prosperous
Taking into account all reasons and details listed above, I would like to accentuate that money have nothing to do with success first reason most important factor that determine success is self satisfaction, second people who could not find happiness in this life, cannot be successful
Re: please check my essay
Here are some (mostly grammatical) changes I believe would make your essay read better.
Originally Posted by greeny366
Re: please check my essay
thank you so much
yep i have some problems with grammar .i will try to avoid such kind of mistakes. Again thank you, you’ve been a great help.
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