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| Could you please help me to correct a citation for a recipient of a honorary doctorate and make it better? Tks a lot! Last edited by ricardosong; 04-May-2005 at 15:47. |
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| which earned him a worldwide reputation.- have earned at the early stage of his primary education.- an early stage/early on in his ... received from the Pu Middle School chosen by his parents- at Pu Middle School, chosen by his parents launched the foundations- laid At that time, he already began to display - By that time, he had already... ?? to proceed his studies under Professor Gunning- to continue/further his studies Prof. X has committed himself to the researches in several complex variables - to research into several... witness this rising star to become a dominant figure- rising sta become (though isn't he already a major figure- a rising star hasn't made it yet) In 1996, he concluded his Doctor Degree from that tertiary institution, famous for the "Beautiful Mind". - I'd delete tertiary institution- no one else can give doctorates had got his highest academic degree- he had this highest academic degree the Yale University and the Standford University- delete 'the' with these two- the University of X, but X University have always been the "observed of the observers" - have always be noted by the notable ??? academic circle.- circles such as Associate Editor of the- such as being the... |
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| Dear Tdol, Thank you so much for your reply, that is very useful. Regarding your "???", I sill would like to have your help on the following: 1. At that time, he already began to display - By that time, he had already... ?? What's is difference between At that time and By that time. I want to refer to the time he was at middle school. 2.In 1996, he concluded his Doctor Degree from that tertiary institution, famous for the "Beautiful Mind". - I'd delete tertiary institution- no one else can give doctorates You are certainly right. But acctually I'm doing a translation and it seems that the original author likes to mention the "Beautiful Mind". Can you make it more natural? 3. - delete 'the' with these two- the University of X, but X University Why? have always been the "observed of the observers" - have always be noted by the notable ??? I want to say he's the centre of the attention and his achivements are notable. How can express this idea? Is the expression I used here is not suitable to the context? Best regards Ricardo |
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| 1- By the time suggests that the prgress had started earlier. 2- Leav the Beautiful \Mind, maybe just say 'institution'. 'tertiary' is unnecessary. 3 Observers can be anybody, the notable are worthy of attention. |
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| Thank you so much for your help! |
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