Please check my writing

[Adam Cruge]

I wrote something. Would you please go through this and tell me how is my writing. For the purpose of good writing you can change it wherever necessary.

" A sullen spell shrouded the entire city making the dull sunlight scarcely pervade through the dingy clouds that all the while lingered in the steeped sky. With evening light commenced to plunge over the sombre mist started to hang about the city drives. Every leafs dripped drop by drop the water like a spout and all roads were sodden. It rained unceasingly in torrent for the past couple of days resulting in rendering the roads no more than a river of mud. And, therefore, a sheer sensation of cool came across the skin of every single one.
Beyond the confines of the city lay a little village, the other side of which petered out into a dense gloomy forest that not many folks dared to come across. Along its one side ran dawdlingly a brook. By the side some hovels lay huddled."

[Adam Cruge]

Please check my writing...Tell me is my sentences correct and sounds natural. How do you rate my writing out of 10?

[Gillnetter]

I wrote something. Would you please go through this and tell me how is my writing. For the purpose of good writing you can change it wherever necessary.

" A sullen spell shrouded the entire city, making allowing the dull sunlight to scarcely pervade through the dingy clouds, that all the while lingered in the steeped sky. With The evening light commenced to plunged over the sombre mist and started to hang about the city drives. Every leafs dripped water drop-by-drop the water like a spout and all the roads were sodden. It had rained unceasingly in torrents for the past couple of days, resulting in rendering the roads no more than a rivers of mud. And, therefore, a sheer cool sensation of cool came across the skin of every single one everyone.
Beyond the confines of the city lay a little village, the other side of which petered out into a dense, gloomy forest that not many folks dared to come across enter (To "come across" is to find something. I believe that you want to say to come into, or, enter.). Along its one side ran dawdlingly a slow brook. By the side, some hovels lay huddled."

You may be trying too hard. It is probably better to use more common words and then different ones as you grow more used to them.