Writing check

[kyntire]

I would like you to help me with this review if possibile. Thanks in advance
"Like many other people these days I dare say I am rather “addicted” to the Internet surfing. As a matter of fact, whichever questions I might have during my working day or leisure time I know the answer can be easily found in the web. The first website I could not live without is certainly veganblog.com. Since I am a vegan but at the same time very fond of cooking (and eating as well) I find this website really useful and full of interesting and intriguing culinary alternatives for my veg meals. It is not necessary to be registered and the access to the recipe database is completely free. The web site is well organised into topics and the recipes are alphabetically listed. Moreover, a search function is available.

Another one among my favourite websites is called ticketone.com; it is specialised in selling theatre and any kind of events (sport, concert, etc) tickets online. I like it very much indeed and tenths of times I booked my seat on line choosing the best available one at the best price. I also spared a lot of time not having to queue up at the box office and never have been surprised by unexpected inconveniences.

The last website I visit almost every day is the timesonline.co.uk. For me it is an alternative but equally valid way to be informed about the current news. I can read the articles anywhere I am both in my laptop or my phone. Besides there is the nice opportunity for the readers to make a comment about a topic they found particularly interesting. I happened to do so every now and then; I must say that seeing my point of view published in The Times made me somehow proud and delighted.



Should you wish then to know something more about a piece of news, fancy your favourite band concert or simply be hungry … now you have a clue!"

[Gillnetter]

I would like you to help me with this review if possibile. Thanks in advance
"Like many other people these days, I dare say I am rather “addicted” to the Internet surfing. As a matter of fact, whichever questions I might have during my working day or leisure time I know the answer can be easily found in on the web. The first website I could not live without is certainly veganblog.com. Since I am a vegan, but at the same time very fond of cooking (and eating as well), I find this website really useful and full of interesting and intriguing culinary alternatives for my veg meals. It is not necessary to be registered and the access to the recipe database is completely free. The web site is well organised into topics and the recipes are alphabetically listed. Moreover, a search function is available.

Another one among my favourite websites is called ticketone.com; it is specialised in selling theatre and any other kind of events (sport, concert, etc) tickets online. I like it very much indeed and tenths of many times I have booked my seat online, choosing the best available one at the best price. I also spared saved a lot of time by not having to queue up at the box office and never have been surprised by unexpected inconveniences. (I'm not sure of what inconveniences you are talking about here. Unless you want to develop this matter further, it might be better to stop the sentence at "office".)

The last website I visit almost every day is the timesonline.co.uk. For me it is an alternative, but equally valid way, to be informed about the current news. I can read the articles anywhere I am, both in on my laptop or my phone. Besides, there is the nice opportunity for the readers to make a comment about a topic they found particularly interesting. I happened to do so every now and then; I must say that seeing my point of view published in The Times made makes me somehow proud and delighted.



Should you wish then to know something more about a piece of news, fancy your favourite band concert, or simply be are hungry … now you have a clue!" (The part starting with "fancy" doesn't seem to work here. You might want to rewrite this entire sentence.)

Gil

[kyntire]

It was a complete disaster, wasn't it ?

[Gillnetter]

It was a complete disaster, wasn't it ?

Not at all. You made a few mistakes in grammar. Even some of the mistakes could be acceptable. I rated this work as I would rate the work of a college student or that of a writer submitting something for publication. You write well. The next step is to make sure that your writing makes complete sense in and by itself. Compared to what I normally read on this forum, you are in the upper percentile.