Please help me check and edit it?
This is a short script, could you help me check and edit it?
Thanks a lot.
<David is waiting for Eden, because he knows Eden has a class on the morning>
Eden :Dad , I have to go now! Bye!( sleep over the time , then run out of the door)
Brian : Eden , you forget to bring your breakfast! (go out the door)
David: uncle! I can take the breakfast to Eden !(hear the words of Eden said, immediately go to next door to take breakfast with Brian)
Brian: Really ! Thank you very much!
David: Wait! You must have to remember to eat breakfast!(At the moment Eden is going to the class, Eden takes the breakfast for Eden)
<Or, when see Eden need help>
(itís raining after the class)
Eden: oops , I forget to bring an umbrella..
David: you will catch a cold !(he see Eden have no umbrella ,go with Eden)
<Or suddenly see Eden is pouring a trash>
Eden:(take a trash with hard look)
David:Let me do that!(he pretending pass and help Eden take the trash ,when he see Eden there)
David: We meet again！(after pouring the trash)
Eden: Yes！I would like to go home now ！And you？
David:Un..(with hesitant look..teacher says that if I donít go to the calss,he may fails me.. but.when David think he can go home with Eden happily ,he immediately says ) yes, I want to go home ,too. Letís go!
Eden: Do you think we meet often ? Itís so strange..
David: ha! I think it must be destiny!(hold the Eden's hand)
Re: Please help me check and edit it?
[?] The bits marked like this, I don't understand.
Originally Posted by ping0303
Punctuation: word mark space word. For example, "home ,too" is wrong. I have fixed it all. You'll notice that this pattern is invariable.
Three dots for an ellipsis ...
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