please help check my paragraphs

[avid_learner]

hi! i would really appreciate it if you could help me with these two paragraphs, check the grammars and which paragraph is better. thank you so much!!!


A. Our pilgrimage to the Holy Land was extraordinary. We had stepped into the Bibleland-- the places that have been read about, spoken of, and studied in the Bible. We had seen the places where heaven came down to earth and left the lasting marks of divinity. Our Holy Land experience truly is an experience of a lifetime.




B. Our pilgrimage to the Holy Land has been extraordinary. We had the rare chance to step into the Bibleland-- the places that have been read about, spoken of, and studied in the Bible. We had the great opportunity to see the places where heaven came down to earth and left the lasting marks of divinity. Our Holy Land experience truly is an experience of a lifetime.

[Gillnetter]

hi! i would really appreciate it if you could help me with these two paragraphs, check the grammars and which paragraph is better. thank you so much!!!


A. Our pilgrimage to the Holy Land was extraordinary. We had stepped into the Bibleland land of the Bible -- the places that we have been read about, spoken of, and studied in the Bible. We had seen saw the places where heaven came down to earth and left the lasting marks of divinity. Our Holy Land experience truly is was an experience of a lifetime.
Bibleland is incorrect. We have to use "The land of the Bible." Since this happened in the past, "is" cannot be used - use "was".

B. Our pilgrimage to the Holy Land has been extraordinary. We had the rare chance to step into the Bibleland land of the Bible -- the places that we have been read about, spoken of, and studied in the Bible. We had the great opportunity to see the places where heaven came down to earth and left the lasting marks of divinity. Our Holy Land experience truly is was an experience of a lifetime.

Gil