Could you please edit my paraghaph to see how is wrong in my grammar

[princeton]

1. I think the way that Canadian government treated Canadian Japanese in 1991 is very similar to the way North communists in Vietnam had treated fallen soldiers of South Vietnam after they won the war in 1975. First, they confiscated properties of these fallen soldiers and then they relocated these soldiers into concentration camps and forced them to work under brutal condition for a decade. While their wives and children were forced to move to mountain areas to do farming in a terrible condition without paying. This is like Canadian Japanese working in beet farms for racist Canadian; although Canadian Japanese got paid for what they worked. The prisons in Vietnam were treat so bad that some of them had been beaten and starved to death .Part of these prisons who were lucky to survive were released from the concentration camps and allowed to immigrate to the US based on a Redress Act called "ODP" (US law) later in 1990, was similar to the Japanese get compensation from Canadian government. In addition, when you look in both events, Canadian Japanese and South Vietnam soldiers were compensated but lots of their families had been separated and their families have suffered for the rest of their lives.

[Gillnetter]

1. I think the way that the Canadian government treated Canadian Japanese in 1991 is very similar to the way North communists in Vietnam had treated the fallen soldiers of South Vietnam after they the communists won the war in 1975.
(You may be confused on dates here. The Japanese were confined in 1941. The Canadian government, in 1988, decided to compensate those who were confined.)


First, they the communists confiscated properties of these fallen soldiers and then they relocated these soldiers into concentration camps and forced them to work under brutal condition for a decade. While Their wives and children were forced to move to mountain areas to do farming in a under terrible conditions without paying payment. This is like the Canadian Japanese working in beet farms for the racist Canadians; although the Canadian Japanese got paid for what they worked their work. The prisons prisoners in Vietnam were treated so badly and that some of them had been beaten and starved to death. Part Some of these prisons prisoners, who were lucky to survive, were released from the concentration camps and allowed to immigrate to the US based on a Redress Act called "ODP" (US law) later in 1990, this was similar to the Japanese getting compensation from the Canadian government. In addition, when you look in at both events, Canadian Japanese and South Vietnam soldiers were compensated but lots of their families had been separated and their families have suffered for the rest of their lives.

I do not believe that you have made a strong case that the events are similar. The South Vietnamese were: put into prisons, beaten, starved, and their families were forced to move to remote areas. The Canadian Japanese were: forced to work in beet fields (which they got paid for) and lost some property (which they got paid for much later). You did not mention how many, if any, of the Canadian Japanese died while working in the beet fields, but you did mention that a number of South Vietnamese died while in prison. The Canadian Japanese were paid while working and got compensated for the loss of properety later. The Vietnamese were allowed to leave their home country - at the expense of someone other than the communist government. How are these two things similar?

[princeton]

Thanks for pointing out the difference in both cases.I will try to make another comparison.

[princeton]

In my opinion, the way that the Canadian government treated Canadian Japanese in 1941 is the same as North communists in Vietnam had treated the fallen soldiers of South Vietnam after the communists won the war in 1975.
First, the communists confiscated properties of these fallen soldiers, then they relocated these soldiers into concentration camps and forced them to work under brutal conditions for a decade. Their wives and children were forced to move to mountain areas to do farming under the fierce weather in scorching mountain areas without payment. These political prisoners in Vietnam were treated so badly and some of them had been beaten and starved to death. Some of these prisoners, who were lucky to survive, were released from the concentration camps and allowed to immigrate to the US based on a Redress Act called "ODP" (US law) later in 1990.
Similarly, Canadian government had impounded Canadian Japanese's possessions in 1941 .They also separated the men from their family and relocated them to concentration camps to do labor works in a frosty weather . Their wives and children were dispersed to ghost towns or abandon livestock barns and they had to live under subhumanconditions . The Canadian government, in 1988, decided to compensate to those Canadian Japanese.
In summary, looking at both events, Canadian Japanese and South Vietnam soldiers were compensated but lots of their families hadfallen apart and their families have suffered from the rest of their lives.

[Gillnetter]

In my opinion, the way that the Canadian government treated the Canadian Japanese in 1941 is the same as how the North communists in Vietnam had treated the fallen soldiers of South Vietnam after the communists won the war in 1975.
First, the communists confiscated properties of these fallen soldiers, then they relocated these soldiers into concentration camps and forced them to work under brutal conditions for a decade. Their wives and children were forced to move to mountain areas to do farming under the fierce weather in scorching mountain areas without payment. These political prisoners in Vietnam were treated so badly and some of them had been beaten and starved to death. Some of these prisoners, who were lucky to survive, were released from the concentration camps and allowed to immigrate to the US based on a Redress Act called "ODP" (US law) later in 1990.
Similarly, the Canadian government had impounded the Canadian Japanese's possessions in 1941. They also separated the men from their family and relocated them to concentration camps to do labor works(labor and work is the same) in a frosty cold weather (Canada, being in the north, is cold. Saying that these people had to work in cold weather doesn't add to your argument, since these people knew that Canada was cold before 1941). Their wives and children were dispersed to ghost towns or abandoned livestock barns and they had to live under subhuman conditions . The Canadian government, in 1988, decided to compensate to those Canadian Japanese.
In summary, looking at both events, Canadian Japanese and South Vietnam soldiers were compensated but lots of their families had fallen apart and their families have suffered from for the rest of their lives.

This is much better.

[princeton]

Thank you very much .Gillnetter. You have saved me.