please, check this paragraph
please, check these lines and give me better words and experssions
Re: please, check this paragraph
Well, I think that the usage of "everyone" is not appropriate because it means " all people" while you may want to express "some people". Therefore, I think it should be " most of us"
Remember, u have to use " participate in", not only participate
Our goal was to prepare a lesson that includes the four skills of English and present it to our classmates.
This sentence should be " Our task was to prepare a lesson including the four English skills then present it before whole class"
Remember! When u write an essay, u should avoid run-on mistake. Your writing should be concise Hence, u can shorten by using "including" instead of " that includes"
So, we sat together and put a plan showing everyone's role
Don't use "so" at the beginning of the sentence. You can replace by " therefore or hence". " And" may be "to"
"Advice" is a uncountable noun. You should write " a piece of advice".
What distinguished our team that was every member.You should omit "that".
one skill of English -> a particular English skill.
listening to English.-> listening skill
Well, u said that every member of your team was good at on skill of English but why u mentioned only speaking, listening, grammar. What about reading and writing?
any of other groups->of is unnecessary, i think so!
through asking them-> What is the function of "them"?
to finish it -> "it" is unnecessary
She admired the presentation -> Can u find another expression? " Admire" sound not good because she is your teacher
Well, if I have time, i may read your writing more carefully. I hope my knowledge can support u
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