MyParaphrase

[sayla]

this is my writing practice. I would like to know some comment on my version. Here is original passaage.



"At some point in the assimilation to the new way (culture), the immigrant child realizes that his or her parents are no longer sources of real knowledge about the new society. Their information and their way of life are no longer the way to success, and as soon as the child understands this, his or her attitude towards the parents changes. Though some people consider such changes to be a betrayal, they are an inevitable part of assimilation." (A. Khutorsky, "Immigrants Adapting")"




this is my version:
"To some extend that in integration, the parent fails that they are still knowledge of new society. When the parent hardly convince their children, they see their children's attitude toward them change. Such change in integration is inevitable."


to my version,I would like to know the missing parts and the way to imrpove my prarprase.

[Gillnetter]

this is my writing practice. I would like to know some comment on my version. Here is original passaage.



"At some point in the assimilation to the new way (culture), the immigrant child realizes that his or her parents are no longer sources of real knowledge about the new society. Their information and their way of life are no longer the way to success, and as soon as the child understands this, his or her attitude towards the parents changes. Though some people consider such changes to be a betrayal, they are an inevitable part of assimilation." (A. Khutorsky, "Immigrants Adapting")"

Key points
1. The immigrant childern realizes that the parents do not know much about the new society
2. The parent's knowledge of the ways of the old country are not the way to succeed in the new country
3. The child's attitude toward the parents changes
4. This change is inevitable


this is my version:
"To some extend extent that in integration, the parent children sees that the parents do not have fails that they are still knowledge of the new society. When the parent hardly convince their children, they see their The children's attitude toward them change. Such a change in integration is inevitable."


to my version,I would like to know the missing parts and the way to imrpove my prarprase.

Gil