Writing Part 2 STORY “from Unit 2 Grammar for FCE”

Hi Guys!!!
Could you please correct my story and tell me your opinions about it?(if it is adequate or not for FCE)


That is the task:
A magazine called “Memories” is running a competition.
Readers are asked to send in stories of 120-180 words about a significant event in their early childhood.


Write your story






This is my answer:


One week ago, I had a meaningful dream which showed one of my childhood episode.
I could see myself when I was a six-year old child.
I was prettier then.
My fair curly hair had their roots in my shiny, round, blue-eyed face.
It was raining heavily and I had lost my home way.
There was only a frightening, black forest around me and I couldn't see any exit.
Suddenly,a “white” woman approached me and, after taking my hand, she led me to the right way.
Her beauty was dazzling and then I thought that her emerald eyes could hypnotize everything.
Finally, I could see my town, but, when I turned around to thank her, she wasn't there anymore.
She had completely disappeared like swallowed by the forest darkness. I have never been able to find out who she was.
When I was younger, I used to think she was a bright angel.
Who knows whether I'll meet her again.

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A magazine called “Memories” is running a competition.
Readers are asked to send in stories of 120-180 words about a significant event in their early childhood.

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Hi elvis

The story is supposed to be based on reality, of an event which happened in your childhood. It should be plausible and realistic.

A story from your dream like those in fairy tales or fantasy as you have written would not be appropriate for the purpose.

ok maybe i should write something more real thank you.