actions speak louder than words

[tri2827]

Hi, everyone.
I am preparing for the toefl test. This is my practicing essay. Can you edit this carefully. I will care a lot about your comments. Thanks.


Topic: do you agree or disagree with this statement:
Actions speak louder then words.

Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.


From the ancient time, by actions, human being has been constructed the world. Many wonders around the world are created buy human labor. Also, by working, human being has made many advancements in many areas. In contrast, words sometime are not reliable, they do not correspond to work. Therefore, I am in agreement that works speak louder than words. My points of view will be elaborated and exemplified as follow.

To begin with, from the moment human being appeared on the earth, they built their world by their actions. For example, pharaohs in Egyptian ancient time used slavery labor to build their pyramids. Thousands of slavers were used to construct these wonders. Latter, depending on his citizens' labor, the mighty emperor Qin Shi Huang built the Great Wall helping China to fortify its enemies. In modern time, many architects constructed fantastic architectures, such as Gustave Eiffel build a steel tower bearing his name in France.

In addition, with our work, we have made many advancements in many areas. In the past, Darwin invented evolution theory of species. This is a big step of human understanding about nature. Also, Newton invented many crucial theories in physics and mathematics, such as three principles of motion, gravity and so on. Later, Einstein discovered relative theory that ushered a new area in technology. Besides, many advancements in other areas, such as medicine, chemistry have been make my human works.

Finally, in contrast, words are sometimes unreliable. We can see this in our normal days. Quite often, someone says that he or she can do some kinds of work, but actually the works are more difficult than he or she thinks. For example, my friend told me that he can communicate comfortably with an American after just 2 months living in US. However, after these two months, he can only speak and listen to simple speeches.

In conclusion, I believe that works are much more effective than words. By working, we has been constructing our world from ancient time, and made improvements in areas. Whereas, words are sometimes not reliable.

[Gillnetter]

Hi, everyone.
I am preparing for the toefl TOEFL test. This is my practicing practice essay. Can Would you edit this carefully? I will care a lot about your comments. Thanks.


Topic: do you agree or disagree with this statement:
Actions speak louder then words.

Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.


From the ancient time, by actions, human beings has been constructed the world (Humans have not been constructing the world, they have been constructing buildings on the world.). Many wonders around the world are created buy by human labor. Also, by working, human beings (A simpler word is "people" rather than human beings.) has have made many advancements in many areas. In contrast, words sometime are not reliable, they do not correspond to work. Therefore, I am in agreement that works speak louder than words. My points of view will be elaborated and exemplified as follows.

To begin with, from the moment humans being appeared on the earth, they built their world by their actions. For example, the Pharaohs in Egyptian ancient ancient Egypt time used slavery slave labor to build their pyramids. Thousands of slavers slaves were used to construct these wonders. Latter Later, depending on his citizens' labor, the mighty emperor, Qin Shi Huang, built the Great Wall helping China to fortify against its enemies (Huang didn't fortify (make stronger) his enemies, he built the wall to fortify China against the enemies of China.). In modern times, many architects have constructed fantastic architectures, such as Gustave Eiffel who build built a steel tower bearing his name in France.

In addition, with our work, we have made many advancements in many areas. In the past, Darwin invented discovered the evolution theory of species. This is was a big step of in human understanding about of nature. Also, Newton invented many crucial theories in physics and mathematics, such as the three principles of motion, gravity and so on. Later, Einstein discovered the relative theory that ushered in a new area in technology. Besides, many advancements in other areas, such as medicine and chemistry have been make made my by human works.

Finally, in contrast, words are sometimes unreliable. We can see this in our normal days. Quite often, someone says that he or she can do some kinds of work, but actually the works are more difficult than he or she thinks. For example, my friend told me that he can communicate comfortably with an American after just 2 months living in US. However, after these two months, he can only speak and listen (he can listen to any type of speech - the question is if he can understand the speech.) to simple speeches.

In conclusion, I believe that works are much more effective than words. By working, we has have been constructing our world from ancient times, and made improvements in areas. Whereas, words are sometimes not reliable.

Gil

[tri2827]

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