my very first toefl assay .. please correct me :)

[fato1988]

this is my first assay in TOEFL .. my english in not that good but i tried to write something .. i'll appreciate it if anyone correct me


topic
people attend school for many different reasons . why do you think people decide to go to school ? use specific reasons and examples to support ur answer .

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most people attend school to expand their knowldge and to specilized in what they love .

getting into a school or university will allow people to have a good job in the future because the primary requirement for getting a job is to have a good certificate from respected school.

the weirdest student that are the ones who keep skipping classes and tried hard to get a low gared in order to stay in their school with their friends .
this is and example of some people who attend school for making friends and social life .

there are other people who attend school to pleased their parents .
so they are tried to achive what their parents failed to acheive in the past and they are not less weird than the people who attend school for making friends .

in my openion , schools help people to expand their knowlge and make their eyes open in the future .
by getting into school we learn how to be responsable and our talent increase and get better .
so lets says that the goodness on a population can be measured by their good school and their highly educated people .


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[fato1988]

anyone plz :(

[Gillnetter]

This is my first assay in TOEFL essay .. my English in not that good but I tried to write something .. i'll I'd appreciate it if anyone could correct me this essay.


Topic
People attend school for many different reasons. Why do you think people decide to go to school ? Use specific reasons and examples to support ur your answer .

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Most people attend school to expand their knowldge and to specilized specialize in what they love .

Getting into a school or university will allow people to have a good job in the future because the primary requirement for getting a job is to have a good certificate from a respected school.

The weirdest students that are the ones who keep skipping classes and tried try hard to get a low gared grade in order to stay in their school with their friends.
This is and an example of some people who attend school for making friends and a social life.

There are other people who attend school to pleased please their parents. so They are tried trying to achive achieve what their parents failed to acheive achieve in the past and they are not less weird than the people who attend school for making friends.

In my openion opinion, schools help people to expand their knowlge knowledge and make their eyes open in the future. (Do not put a space after the end of the sentence and the period.)
By getting into school we learn how to be responsable and our talent increases and gets better.
So, lets says that the goodness on a population can be measured by their good schools and their highly educated people .


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#1. Capitalize the first letter of every sentence.
#2. Do not put a space after the end of the last word in a sentence - the period should be right after the last character.
#3. There are too many words spelled incorrectly.

[fato1988]

thank u very much :)