proofread essay and feedback: Love marriage Vs Arranged marriage?

[bspkumar]

Hi All,

Please proofread the following essay and suggest me the alternate and best way of sentence construction. Also reduce the word count from 570 to 500. Thank you..

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Love marriage Vs arranged marriage


Marriage is one of the most important things in life as it shapes the personal life as well as the career. It is a bond that establishes a long-term relationship between the man and woman. Successful married life involves selecting the right partner and maintaining a long-term relationship by understanding and acceptance of each other. Selecting the right partner can be done by an arranged or a love marriage. Both types of marriages have their own pros and cons. To choose the best, we need to analyze the ways of selecting a life partner and how they shape the later married life.

Arranged marriages had been in practice from many centuries both in western and eastern countries. Especially, they had been practiced by royal families for political or economical gain or to save their lineage. Especially in India, these are practiced to keep the division between different castes. Many people, especially in the western countries don’t prefer arranged marriages as they don’t offer freedom to select the right partner according to their desires and needs. This is reasonable. How a man or woman can share everything in their life with a woman or a man they never met before? How if a man or a woman has completely different opinions or preferences of leading a life? For example, can an egocentric man and a woman build a long-term relationship? A woman or man who is greedy of wealth can live happily with a man or woman who likes a simple life? Definitely can’t. But, some people, especially in eastern countries support arranged marriages as the divorce rates are less when compared to the love marriages. Less divorce rates not necessarily mean that the couple is happy. They might be living together considering the relationships between both families or may be due to the fear of response of society. Apart from these disadvantages, arranged marriages have advantages also. Arranged marriages are generally arranged by parents who are matured and can capable of taking right decisions than the children. And, they always try to give the best to their children.

The beauty of love marriages is that the freedom of selecting the life partner according to ones desires and needs. The intimacy between lovers helps in understanding each other which in turn help in choosing the life partner for long term and harmonious relationship. However, there are many cases of unsuccessful love marriages. The success of love marriages lies in the maturity, honesty and forethought of the couple involved. Unmatured couple may not has the capability to take the right decisions, they may feel physical attraction or any other influence as love which may results in breakup of relationship later. The breakup of a relationship or an unsuccessful marriage is a great damage to life or career of couple. Love marriages are treated as taboo in some of the eastern countries and the impact of a failed love marriage is devastating to the couple, especially for women. Especially in India, such woman doesn’t deserve respect in the society and so lacks social security.

Choosing between arranged or love marriage is relative to the couple involved and the society they came from. Arranged marriages may beneficial to some societies and love marriages may beneficial to some individuals. Whether it is an arranged marriage or a love marriage, the success lies in building a long-term, symbiotic, and harmonious relationship.

[Gillnetter]

Hi All,

Please proofread the following essay and suggest me the alternate and best way of sentence construction. Also reduce the word count from 570 to 500. Thank you..

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Love marriage Vs arranged marriage


Marriage is one of the most important things in life as it shapes the personal life as well as the one's career (I'm unsure of what you mean by marriage in relation to a career.). It is a bond that establishes a long-term relationship between the a man and a woman. Successful married life involves selecting the right partner and maintaining a long-term relationship by the understanding and acceptance of each other. Selecting the right partner can be done either by an arranged marriage or a through love marriage. Both types of marriages have their own pros and cons. To choose the best, we need to analyze the ways of selecting a life partner and how they shape the later married life. (You write that a successful marriage involves selecting he right partner, yet in an arranged marriage someone else is doing the selecting. Selecting is not the correct word here. Try to find another word that will cover both arranged marriages and marriages where the people concerned make the decision of who to marry.)

Arranged marriages had (had points to the past - use "have".) been in practice from for many centuries, both in western and eastern countries. Especially, they had have been practiced by royal families for political or economical economic gain or to save their lineage. Especially in India, these are practiced to keep the division between different castes. Many people, especially in the western countries, don’t prefer arranged marriages as they don’t offer the freedom to select the right partner according to their desires and needs. This is reasonable. How can a man or woman can share everything in their life with a woman or a man they have never met before? How What if a man or a woman has have completely different opinions or preferences of leading a life? For example, can an egocentric man and a woman build a long-term relationship? Can a woman or man who is greedy of wealth can live happily with a man or woman who likes a the simple life? Definitely can’t. But, some people, especially in eastern countries, support arranged marriages as the divorce rates are less when compared to the love marriages. Less Lower divorce rates do not necessarily mean that the couple is happy. They might be living stay together considering because of the relationships between both families or may be maybe due to the fear of the response of society. Apart from these disadvantages, arranged marriages have advantages also. Arranged marriages are generally arranged by parents who are matured mature and can are capable of taking making the right decisions than the children are. And, they always try to give the best to their children. (In many cultures the parents are not involved in arranging a marriage - a third party - a marriage broker - does the selecting.)

The beauty of love marriages is that the freedom of selecting the a life partner according to one's desires and needs. The intimacy between lovers helps in understanding each other, which in turn, helps in choosing the a life partner for a long term and harmonious relationship. However, there are many cases of unsuccessful love marriages. The success of love marriages lies in the maturity, honesty and forethought of the couple involved. Unmatured couple may not has the capability to take make the right decisions, they may feel physical attraction or any other influence as love which may results in breakup of relationship later. The breakup of a relationship or an unsuccessful marriage is a great damage to both the life or the career of a couple. Love marriages are treated as taboo in some of the eastern countries and the impact of a failed love marriage is devastating to the a couple, especially for women. Especially in India, such woman doesn’t don't deserve respect in the society and so lacks social security.

Choosing between an arranged or love marriage is relative to the couple involved and to the society they came from. Arranged marriages may be beneficial to some societies and love marriages may beneficial to some individuals. Whether it is an arranged marriage or a love marriage, the success lies in building a long-term, symbiotic, and harmonious relationship.

I've have made a number of corrections. You need to work on the correct use of articles, especially "a" and "the". It is your responsibility to edit this back to the desired number of words.

[bspkumar]

Thank you, Gillnetter. I'll work on using articles correctly.
I'll come with another essay.