proofread MBA admsn essay:three most substantial accomplishments

[hyunism]

Hi, I am posting one of my draft essays for MBA admission. Please check for the errors and let me know the modifications required, I think this is too lenghy also. Please help me.


What are your three most substantial accomplishments, and why do you view them as such?

[nobody101]

I think the institution (the school name starting with S and ending with N) you are applying for calls for 300 words per essay question...and this is 532(!), not including the Ali quote intro...

You may want to tighten it up a bit and then upload it again to make the job little easier for others...

Good luck...

[hyunism]

Thanks for your advice. However,I want to fix grammatical errors first because I'm not native and worrying about the grammatical errors most of all.