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uchendu_okeke · #1 31-Aug-2005, 20:47

hello. i attend school in georgia (albany state university) and in order to graduate, we have to pass the regents exam, which consists of an essay and reading section. i am practicing on the essay portion of the exam. here is the topic of the essay and my introduction:

How is the threath of AIDS changing dating habits?
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Acquired immunodeficiency syndrome. These are three words that a human being does not want to be associated with. Every year, millions of people all over the country are affected with AIDS. Due to its existence, AIDS have changed dating habits.

**is my intro okay (grammar etc) or does it need more work? thanks for your time and help.

uchendu_okeke · #2 31-Aug-2005, 20:54

*revised essay intro*

Acquired immunodeficiency syndrome: These are three words that a human being does not want to be associated with. Every year, millions of people all over the country are affected with AIDS. Due to its harmful ways, AIDS has become a threat to dating.