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TOPIC:When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keeps them alive.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
In recent decades the debate over whether or not classical living methods and careers being supported has sparked a lot of controversy among people and economists. I will explain why I firmly believe that all modern technology achievements are highly acceptable; however, disagreement points will be discussed too.
One of the main reason of people who are in favor of being kept old skills and living habits is that they are our cultural heritages and can show our national belief to others. Furthermore, some economists believe that former style of working needed more labor force; consequently unemployment rate will be decreased. Moreover, old fashioned methods of working waste a lot of natural resources and having serious risks for workers. Aside from the fact that these methods produce bad quality and expensive merchants.
On the other hand, it is widely believed that a better standard of living can be achieved by state of the art proficiencies and lifestyle. Advanced technology outcomes cause to higher productivity, high quality products and services and reducing in production costs. As a result, all active section of economy will be more efficient and profitable also economic situation will be improved. According to new World Banks` report, being modernized in economy, industry and society leads to enhancing in all features of life especially in life expectancy, education rate and Net National Income. Also high-tech methods in industries are often more safe and secure ways of doing jobs.
In a nutshell, based on that which has been said, it is quite fair to say that we shouldn’t spend our budgets and times to support out of date habits and careers, due to its insufficiency and negative effects on economy.