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I am feeling optimistic and hopeful and Im taking steps I need to face all this dilema that is happening with my life and so to live the life that I deserve.
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I am feeling optimistic and hopeful and Im taking steps I need to face all this dilema that is happening with my life and so to live the life that I deserve.
You certainly want to break up this sentence into several ones. Not sure about the progressive -- "I feel" is probably better. I don't think you can take steps to face dilemma. Something happens in your life.
If my English were not so rusty I would try and rephrase it, but I'd better forget it

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Hi Francois! I'd really appreciate if you rephrase it. please. thank you so much
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I am feeling optimistic and hopeful and Im taking steps I need to face all this dilema that is happening with my life and so to live the life that I deserve.


I feel optimistic and hopeful.I am taking steps which i need to face all this dilema that is happening in my life to live the life that I deserve .

but , i can't get the meaning of (( dilema )) could you explain it please ?
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I am feeling optimistic as well as hopeful and I'm taking steps needed to face all these dilemmas in my life so as to live a deserving life.

I suppose this is what is intended. I guessed the meaning here and there. [note that "and" should not be found twice in a long sentence so close to one another. Just does not work.]

But I am for the breaking up of the sentence. Shorter sentences in the midst of long sentences gives the reader a break as well as enhances the meaning.

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