Could anyone help me revise this tofel intergrated wrting? Thanks!!

[wanglili]

The lecture talks differently from the reading in that it defies the reasons the reading uses to support the idea that dinosaurs are endotherms. It does not agree that the region dinosaurs used to live, their leg position and their bone structure can demonstrate that they are endotherms.
To begin with, dinosaurs did live in Polar Regions but they didn't have to develop a system to sustain constant body temperature as stated in the reading. In fact, those areas were much warmer during the time when dinosaurs lived there, according to lecture. Even though there were periods that were cold, dinosaurs can also migrate or hibernate to escape that cold.
Then, the evidence cited in the reading that legs are under dinosaurs' bodies like other endotherms doesn't suffice to show they are one of them. Because endotherms basically use that leg position to maintain the effectiveness when running, whereas dinosaurs, as said in the lecture used their legs to support their unprecedented body weight, which is only possible when legs are under their bodies.
In the third place, bone structure, which was used in the reading as another evidence, can also be cited to show the just opposite. Bones of dinosaur do not only contain Haversian, but their growth rings uncover the truth that they did not grow fast all over the year. They actually had to lower their growth speed to adapt to the cold weather like reptiles.

[Gillnetter]

The lecturetalks differentlyis different from the reading in that it defies does not agree with the reasons the reading uses to support the idea that dinosaurs are were endotherms. It does not agree that the region dinosaurs used to live in, their leg position and their bone structure can demonstrate that they are were endotherms.(You are using the present tense "are" when you should be using the past tense "were".)
To begin with, dinosaurs did live in polar regions but they didn't have to develop a system to sustain constant body temperature as stated in the reading. In fact, those areas were much warmer during the time when dinosaurs lived there, according to the lecture. Even though there were periods that were cold, dinosaurs can could also have migrated or hibernated to escape that the cold.
Then, the evidence cited in the reading that legs are under dinosaurs' bodies like other endotherms doesn't suffice to show they are one of them. Because endotherms basically use that leg position to maintain the effectiveness when running, whereas dinosaurs, as said in the lecture, used their legs to support their unprecedented body weight, which is only possible when legs are under their bodies. (I wouldn't use "unprecedented" since it means that there was nothing like this in the past and you have no real way of knowing that.)
In the third place (Don't use "third place" - you didn't use "first" or "second place".) , bone structure, which was used in the reading as another (another piece of evidence or more evidence.) evidence, can also be cited to show the just opposite (show just the opposite). Bones of dinosaur do not only contain Haversian, but their growth rings uncover the truth that they did not grow fast all over the year. They actually had to lower their growth speed to adapt to the cold weather, like reptiles. (They were reptiles, weren't they?)

Gil

[wanglili]

THANKS,Gil! I've learnt a lot.