Could you correct my review?

[lucakun]

Hello guys, I'm a new member here!!!
Could anyone proofread any possible mistake of my review please??
I'm studying for FCE exam therefore I need to improve my english skills!!

This's the exam task:

Reviews wanted

Our magazine is going to include a new section called Popular music sites.
If there is an internet music site that you visit often, why not write a review of it? In your review, describe the site, say what you think of it and wheter would recommend it to other people.

MusicTime

Recently surfing on the internet I came across a really interesting site, which I immediately found gorgeous. As soon as I entered I noticed several options, menus and relevant news better than other sites.
MusicTime, this is its name, offers to its members many things to do. Certainly if you enjoy music you can listen the new hits which have peaked the top, have a look at the different kinds of music starting with rock to vintage music and even find out some revelations of your favourite singer.
However, it is not possible to download music from this site, which is pity.
In spite of this it surely fulfills every whim of people who love music, in fact MusicTime is absolutely deemed one of the best websites in circulation.
To sum up I would suggest everyone joining this awesome site, I am sure you will not regret your choice.

[Gillnetter]

Hello guys, I'm a new member here!!!
Could anyone proofread any possible mistakes of my review please?? ("Could" indicates ability. A better choice is either "Will" or "Would")
I'm studying for FCE exam, therefore, I need to improve my English skills!!.

This'sThis is the exam task:

Reviews wanted

Our magazine is going to include a new section called Popular Music Sites.
If there is an internet music site that you visit often, why not write a review of it? In your review, describe the site, say what you think of it and wheter whether you would recommend it to other people.

MusicTime

Recently while surfing on the internet I came across a really interesting site, which I immediately found gorgeous (I wouldn't use "gorgeous" this way. Another way to write this is, "...which I liked."). As soon as I entered I noticed several options, menus and relevant news which were better than other sites.
MusicTime, this is its name, offers to its members many things to do for its members. Certainly, if you enjoy music you can listen the new hits which have peaked to the top, have a look (people usually hear music, not look at music.) at the different kinds of music starting with rock and moving to vintage music and even find out some revelations of about your favourite singer.
However, it is not possible to download music from this site, which is a pity.
In spite of this, it surely fulfills every whim of people who love music, in fact MusicTime is absolutely deemed one of the best websites in circulation.
To sum up, I would suggest everyone joining this awesome site, I am sure you will not regret your choice.

Gil

[lucakun]

Thank you very much for your corrections!!