My love for Egypt (It needs your help to be modified)

[Economist2010]

My love for Egypt flows as blood flows in my veins, and I hope that it passes these hard times peacefully soon, but the economy in the current situations isn't that great especially when it comes to the labour market, and for that reason I'm seeking to work in a country with a better economic situation. This would in turn contributes in improving my country's economy through the transfer of part of my capital as an employee working abroad to my country.

[Gillnetter]

My love for Egypt flows as blood flows in my veins, and I hope that it passes these hard times peacefully soon, but the economy in the current situations isn't that great especially when it comes to the labour market, and for that reason I'm seeking to work in a country with a better economic situation. This would in turn contributes in improving my country's economy through the transfer of part of my capital as an employee working abroad to my country.

No - stop. Try to write short sentences. Long ones become too involved and the meaning gets lost. It is not a sign of sophistication to write long sentences. Here is an example of what I mean:
My love for Egypt flows as blood flows in my veins. I hope that it passes these hard times peacefully soon. The economy isn't that great, especially when it comes to the labour market. For that reason, I'm seeking work in a country with a better economic situation. This would, in turn, contribute to improving my country's economy through the transfer of part of my pay as an employee working abroad.