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| I'm very confused and can you help me to edit and give your estimation for my work? I'm very grateful. And if you can, please give me marks. Here is my essay: You worked almost everyday in a week, and one day for relaxing and entertainment is very necessary. Sunday can be that day. How do you spend this day? According to me, the first thing I’d like to do is getting up late. It’ll make you fresh and you ‘ll have more isspring to make a new plan, to have a new idea for a new week. And the second thing I really want to do is meeting the old and new friends to talk, to tell the interesting story or just about things which I did in last week. Because, you know, friends are the best one to share and you’ll feel comfortable, relaxable. And then, I’ll take the rest time for my dear brother. We’ll go to the cinema to watch the famous films, eat in the street to make him fatter.( He’s really a stick, I mean he’s very thin).This ‘ll be the most fanstatic because I don’t have to pay anything. After this day, I think I’ll work better, more effective in a new week. And I wish every day was weekend. |
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| according to me- delete I’d like to do is getting- get isspring- ?? energy? make a new plan, to have a new idea for a new week- I'd use 'plans', 'ideas' and 'the new week' is meeting- meet the old and new friends- delete 'the to tell the interesting story- just one story?? just about things- just talk/chat I did in last week- delete in best one to share- ones... share things with relaxable- and reaxed take the rest time for - spend the rest of the time with my more effective- more effectively |
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