help!! college admission essay.what is your goal?why are you passionate about it?

[Collegestudent12]

Passion for Fashion.
　
Materials;Pins,scissors,marking tools,threads,fabrics,sewing machaine, and .mannequin.pins are in my messy hair bun,scissors in my hands,threads are in my earing loop,fabrics are draped across my shoulder and wrapped around my neck.Staring at a blank mannequin my design became nebulous .I let my creative go wild fabrics flying in the air in a blink of an eye .I've designed an auspicious beautiful one of a kind dress.My goals are making my fashion designing dreams come true .
Therefore starting by taking fashion design classes and doing hands on work, I also plan to take business and management classes . With my fashion design and business and management skills,creative and knowledge I plan to open my boutique in Miami then take my business world wide .I'm passionate about achieving this goal because fashion helps me explain who i am . fashion express who you are... ,what you stand for... . With my creative skills I can put forth the work on to my designs and make sure every girl, and woman feels beautiful and confident because they are.

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Lasciate ogne speranza, voi ch'entrate.

[Collegestudent12]

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