Re: COLLEGE STUDENT NEEDS HELP!
You will not get that kind of help in this forum. In fact, we discourage people from posting homework for us to do. Once you submit the essay and get it corrected and graded, feel free to post whatever you feel is not correct or you disagree with; then we can comment.
But what you're trying to do is called cheating: your teachers/professors want to know what you can do, not what we can do.
Please be aware that I'm neither a native English speaker nor (at present) a teacher.