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    Ashiuhto is offline Senior Member
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    Default An Amazing Train Station

    The following paragraph is fictional. Would anyone be kind enough to correct the errors for me? Thanks!

    Today was a sunny day, and I had an exciting visit to the world's biggest train station, which was world-famous for its grand, spectacular and imposing structure. I was fascinated by its magnificent appearance, whose wonderful workmanship excelling nature. I sat watching passengers bustle in and out of the train station. While I was gazing at the serene sky, a breeze blew over the station square. Riding on the wind, I flew into the train station. The interior of the train station, with its superb decorations, had a nostalgic design and inspiration. However, it was overcrowded with travelers, and I was almost trod by the stream of people. Thankfully, my best friend, the wind, rescued me from the siege. It was a scary, amazing, and breathtaking adventure.
    Last edited by Ashiuhto; 03-Nov-2012 at 14:52. Reason: revision

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