Hello, Could somebody check my IELTS writing task 2 ?
Some people feel that certain workers like nurses, doctors and teachers are undervalued and should be paid more, when other people like film actors or company bosses are paid huge sums of money that are out of proportion to the importance of the work that they do.Some people feel that certain workers like nurses, doctors and teachers are undervalued and should be paid more, when other people like film actors or company bosses are paid huge sums of money that are out of proportion to the importance of the work that they do.
THIS MY WORK
In our world industry of entertainment like cinema and music are better paid than industry education and health even the last two are more helpful. But it can be explained that health and education supported by government while entertainment provided with money from business. However government should hold salary of doctors and teachers at enough high level because their work is undervalued.
Doctors and teachers have high response from their clients. Mistake of doctors may cost a life of patient. And teacher fault will affect the person of students and pupils. Take into account this factors it will need to think about to do their jobs well-paid. However it is not so easy to do that. Workers like nurses, doctors and teachers are taken huge amount of percent in workforce of country. And all of them get salary from government. Opposite film actors get money from cinema business. Film with actor can be sold hundred times. And bring big money their creatures. It is not require special knowledge and concentration like doctor’s work. Actors cratered by their personal quality and skills. And by these criteria only the best get high wages other get low. It may be lower than social workers.
To conclusion, doctors and teachers should provide with high paid salary. And to develop system which consider best salary for the most experienced and educated person.