I rewrite it please can you tell me now do i needsome more work or not?
His name was Aleem and he was an only child. Unfortunately a war split out between two tribes and consequently many innocent people had lost their lives. Smoke of burning houses and human bodies has covered the horizon. Aleemís town which called a paradise on an earth became a village of terror and bloodshed.
Originally Posted by emsr2d2
Aleemís parents were very worry regarding his safety. But donít know what to do. There was no way to go and no place for refuge. Because after long waiting and hard struggling they founded the job and has settled down in here. So they want to stay here for ever and also they want to see the tree of their hope to be thrive.
They like this area because they want to live, die and burred over here on the side of their parentís grave.
But on the other hand they were very worry and want to leave this place before any calamity befall over their life.
Re: I rewrite it please can you tell me now do i needsome more work or not?
As I said, we can't help you with homework. You can't keep posting new versions here and hoping that we'll make corrections and amendments.
It still needs more work but, for now, I am closing this thread. Come back to us and open a new thread when you get your work back from your teacher if you don't understand any of the teacher's corrections.