“I’ve written a virtual short story and now I need you to help me for check it.”

[sajjad64]

My name is mark Wilson. I’m 34 years old. In the past I’ve a lot of dreams. When I was child I wanted to have a self employed job in the future. But know I’m a fire fighter. our station is located in the rose park st. My colleagues are in a good company with me. They call me willy and until now we haven’t any fed up.
In our job you can’t cut the corner because of the rigid time table. At work we need to be ready all the time because the alarm may be abrupt ring. During the operation staffs should obey the commander. One day in the operation I understood that the machine didn’t have enough water and immediately paged another machine to come and then carried the operation on.
Being a fire fighter is a satisfying job. Fire fighters are not required to have any academic qualifications but they must brave, strong and patient. This job is responsible and challenging and it’s full of stress. Only people who have sedulity can do it.
Finally I have to say that I enjoy my job forwhy we can help a lot of people every day.

[emsr2d2]

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