Lot of mistakes ...

[sweetie_s]

Dear Teacher,

The following letter has a lot of mistakes. Could you please correct it?


Subject : Annual Vacation

Sir,

This is to kindly inform you that I joined this esteemed company in September 2003 and my annual vacation was due since September 2004.

I would like to avail my vacation and visit my hometown Bangalore, India on March 9, 2006 to settle my personal problems.

Therefore, I humbly request you to approve my vacation and request accounts to settle by dues up to December 2005.

Thank you for kind understanding, cooperation and support.


Yours truly,

[Tdol]

annual vacation was due- has been due
to avail my vacation- I'd say 'avail myself of' in british English, but I have seen this use in Indian English- who are you writing to?
request accounts to settle by dues up to December 2005- request that accounts due to December 2005 are settled
Thank you for kind- your kind...

[sweetie_s]

annual vacation was due- has been due
to avail my vacation- I'd say 'avail myself of' in british English, but I have seen this use in Indian English- who are you writing to?
request accounts to settle by dues up to December 2005- request that accounts due to December 2005 are settled
Thank you for kind- your kind...

Is there any best format to write the same letter in a good manner?