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| The Unemployment The unemployment can be define as a type of a difficult situation in which we can not find any job. Even the educated person or qualified one is not able to get a job. It is caused by many factors. For example, the high amount of population in a particular area. Imagine a city of more than ten million residents, is it easy to find a job? Of course, no. It is really a very dangerous problem which make the economical rate of the city falling very fast. It is a natural thing to find the unemployment in every country in the world. Qatar is one example of million of big countries all over the world , where we can find the unemployment. As you know it has a small population, although we can observe a little bit of the unemployment. It is more common among the uneducated people. Even though, they have the physical ability, they do not work any more. So if they are lucky, they might getting to be a pensioner. In other hand, they sit by a road asking for money. Do you know that the unemployment problem is unsolvable? Certainly, It is difficult problem, because it is caused by the people themselves. How? If they do not find a job for one attempt only, they feel frustrated and upset. They never try again. So they easily become an unemployed persons. All these factors help the unemployment to be more common. In the future, it might destroy the system of the country completely. Note: Duration: 50 minutes. Words NUM: 250 words Please: Evaluate my essay |
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| The unemployment- no need for article- you're talking in general can be define - past participle (and do we need the definition?) Even the educated person or qualified one is not able to get a job.- always? Try using a modal verb Imagine a city of more than ten million residents, is it easy to find a job?- punctuation Of course, no.- wrong word problem which make- subject + verb agreement the economical rate of the city falling very fast- change 'rate' and cahnge 'falling' million of big countries all over the world , where we can find the unemployment- millions? Ther are only a few hundred countries in the world, large or small + punctuation problem s you know it has a small population,- in the previous sentence, you said it was a big country- the logic doesn't follow Even though, they- punctuation they might getting - verb form In other hand- preposition and article It is difficult problem- capitalisation and article missing |
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| Thank you a lot Tdol. |
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| You're welcome, Hulkman. |
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