Re: does this even make sense?
I got it. Yes, it makes sense, but it needs editing. It needs capital letters at the beginnings of sentences, the pronoun "I" needs to be capitalized. Some of the sentences need to be broken up into cleaner, shorter sentences. You can't use the "..." to indicate a pause in correct writing. It's equals it is. The punctuation needs attention. If you want, you can clean up some of these things and I will check your second draft.
A free email English guide!