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[dean]

I have rephrased my sentences.Would somebody please comments

1) Both research on information provided in pharmaceutical advertisements in medical journals and by pharmaceutical representatives have shown the low quality of information. These have created a need for doctors in critically analyzing promotional information which may reduce the negative impact of promotion to doctors prescribing behaviour and patients’ health. However, no study has evaluated the skills of physicians in critically analyzing information in pharmaceutical promotion.

2) Another example of patients’ health is at risk is when physicians are convinced to use new drugs with unproven health benefits which may lower the usage of older drugs that have been shown in clinical trials to improve health outcomes

Regards,
Dean

[RonBee]

1) Both research on information provided in pharmaceutical advertisements in medical journals and by pharmaceutical representatives have shown the low quality of information.

Say:

Both research on information provided in pharmaceutical advertisements in medical journals and by pharmaceutical representatives have shown the low quality of such information.

These have created a need for doctors in critically analyzing promotional information which may reduce the negative impact of promotion to doctors prescribing behaviour and patients’ health.

You need to simplify that statement. I cannot understand what you are trying to say.

2) Another example of patients’ health is at risk is when physicians are convinced to use new drugs with unproven health benefits which may lower the usage of older drugs that have been shown in clinical trials to improve health outcomes

Say:

The health of patients is put at risk when physians are convinced to use new drugs with unproven health benefits which may lower the usage of older drugs that have been shown in clinical trials to improve health outcomes.

[dean]

Thanks Ronbee.

Regards,

Dean