please correct it

[sya_wati86]

i have already make a correction..can check again??

[RonBee]

<<The explanation is needed to make the training very clear what the companies are doing. From that explanation, the training knows what should do and learn something from their training time.>>

Better:

The explanation is needed to make it clear what the function of the company is and how things work there. From that explanation the trainee learns more about his job and how he will fit in at the company.

[sya_wati86]

i want make report, if i don't want to use 'he' how??

[sya_wati86]

how about the another essay??

[RonBee]

i want make report, if i don't want to use 'he' how??

If I want to make a report but I don't want to use "he" how do I do that?

One possibility would be to use the plural, thus:

From that explanation the trainees learn more about their jobs and how they will fit in with the company.

What do you think?

[RonBee]

<<As a new person at the company, Introduce the training to the other stuff are make the training comfortable to communication.>>


As part of their orientation, introduce the trainees to the other staff. It is important that they achieve a certain level of comfort with the people they are going to be working with.

<<The first task at the first day are modified the AutoCAD drawing and introduce the Programmable Logic Control (PLC) Panel.>>

The first tasks on the first day are modifying the the AutoCAD drawing and introducing the Programmable Logic Control (PLC) Panel.

<<From the task, the training can learn and know what the AutoCAD drawing is all about. Also make the training familiar with the AutoCAD software before another task is given.>>

By doing that assignment the trainee will learn what the AutoCAD drawing is all about. Make the trainee familiar with the AutoCAD software before another assignment is given.

How am I doing?

[RonBee]

how about the another essay??

I didn't see another one, but if you have another one for somebody to look at please post it on another thread.

[Tdol]

What other one? Also, please remember that this is a forum for discussing language issues, not a proofreading service.

[RonBee]

It is very difficult for me to make suggestions or offer corrections if I cannot figure out what the writer is trying to say. Such is the case here, especially with the following.

<<The drawing edited is The Tinggi ‘A’ Platform Drawing and the Tiong ‘A’ Platform drawing. From the drawing, the border is replaced with the new one border. The format and style border is depending on the client or company.>>

For the last sentence, depends on is better than is depending on. For the rest, no suggestions.

<<An introducing the PLC Panel by K.L Soo is makes the training very clear what is all about. The differentiation between what have learned and true PLC can see from this explanation. Also know the application of PLC in industries.>>

No suggestions.

<<This drawing is edited by using the ProgeCAD LT2006 software. This software is quite same with the AutoCAD software. So, to edit the drawing can be use ProgeCAD LT2006 software or AutoCAD software.>>

Rather than quite same with (Don't ever use that!), say similar to.

<<As conclusion, have a many software can use to edit the drawing. From this task, the subject AutoCAD have learned at semester one can apply.>>

Say: "In conclusion...." Also, you can't end that last sentence that way, as "apply" has to take an object. (I thought I had made a mistake in copying it at first. I didn't.)

Unfortunately, there is much of that that I could not understand. You need to work harder at making yourself clear.



(Say: "I have made some corrections. Can you check it again?")

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