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Old 16-Sep-2006, 09:13
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It is a theme from one movie .....if you know this movie....please give me some advices as well....but mainly...please edit the grammas and sentence structure for me ....Please.......
The following lines are labelld with numbers.......It might be helpful if you want to give me some feedback...Thanks

Please give me some advice.")
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Old 18-Sep-2006, 03:30
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Say:
the children acted like they were bewitched so the judge would believe them if they accused someone of being a witch.

It would be better if you posted the entire thing on the forum. As it is, individual sections cannot be copied.



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the children acted like they were bewitched so the judge would believe them if they accused someone of being a witched

It would be better if you posted the entire thing on the forum. As it is, individual sections cannot be copied.
Thanks for your advice........and that is the entire thing..our teacher only asked us to write 8 to 12 sentences.............

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Thanks for your advice........and that is the entire thing..our teacher only asked us to write 8 to 12 sentences.............
It wasn't posted on the forum.

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