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Hi every one
can you please edit this part of my report;

It is too early to give a precise idea about skills development and knowledge in the agency, for the simple reason that the number of days I spent at the agency were only eight days. However I will highlight some development during the eight days of my placement.
I started my placement on Tuesday 08-08-2006 then Leigh didn’t attend office on Friday 11-08-2006, he came back from leave on Tuesday 22-08-2006.
During these three days I attended the hand over session with Leigh and other staff
During his sudden absence I left without supervision, and I have been totally ignored by the rest of the busy staff who have no idea about what going on. However during that time I visited a number of agencies such as Norwood and sunshine CCU.
When Leigh came back, I managed to engage with consumers and staff; I conducted a couple of interviews with staff one of them was with the team leader.
One of the things I never disclosed is that I have been diagnosed few years ago with Osteoporosis disease, as a result of that I had a fractious in my upper back,
Unfortunately, on 29-08-2006 , after a walk with some consumers I felt some pain on my back , I decided to take one capsule of Tramanal , a prescribed painkiller,to ease my chronic condition, Tramanal causes drowsiness .( please see attached doctor’s report)
One hour later I attended a meeting with consumers conduced by Leigh, from 2 pm to 3 pm, I was so sick and tiered, unfortunately I fainted for about two minutes.

Despite this incident, I displayed a great sense of initiative and responsibility, and I was always cooperative during my eight days placement.
I disagree with Leigh’s report, which was inaccurate and inconsistent; Leigh of course provided no evidence in his report.
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It is too early to give a precise idea about skills development and knowledge in the agency, for the simple reason that the number of days I spent at the agency were only eight days.
It is too early to give a precise idea about skills development and knowledge in the agency because I only spent eight days at the agency.

Please explain what you mean by knowledge in the agency.

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Dear Ron bee

thanks for your effort, however I haven't got the rest of the editing yet, can you please contiue correcting my report.
You asked me what do I mean by the knowledge, what I mean by the knowledge is skills.
You can deleat the word knowledge if it is not necessary.
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I started my placement on Tuesday 08-08-2006. Leigh was absent on Friday 11-08-2006. He came back from leave on Tuesday 22-08-2006.
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