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| One day, they lost their way, the boy felt so tired and terrified, at last he could move any more with his weak legs. His father took out five coins and buried one under the ground, the father gave the boy the other four and said, "Son, you must realize that we all five coins just like childhood, teenage, young, middle age and agedness, now you have spent one under the ground and you can not spend all on the grassland without any more significance, you should leave here and take more sight over the world." Encouraged by his father, bageda left his home and be a great captain |
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and terrified that he could not move anymore with his weak legs. Quote:
the other four and said, "Son, you must realize that we all have five coins - childhood, teenage, youth, middle age, and old age. You have now spent one (that is) under the ground. You cannot spend them all on the grassland without any (more) significance. You should leave here and see more of the world." ... and became a great captain. |
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after your modification, the essay become more vivid and flowing. Thanks |
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| Wuwei, you are welcome. Upon re-reading my suggestion, I realized that I don't need the "and" before "buried one under the ground". So the suggested sentence is - " His father took out five coins, buried one under the ground, and gave the boy the other four and said,...." |
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