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Old 08-Oct-2006, 05:50
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Hi Friends, Following is the covering letter written for one position. Could some one check this one for gramatical mistakes as well as for improvements in any respect, if any.. . Thank you for your help.


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I, certified software auditor (CSA), currently work for ABC in Norwalk, NY as a Quality Analyst. As a QA, I am responsible for developing test strategy, test plans, traceability matrices, execution of test plans, validating defects, producing defect reports and conducting triage meetings every day.

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As you will notice in the enclosed resume, I have experience working in various capacities such as QA,Business Analyst, Project lead, and Programmer/Analyst. As a Business Analyst, I have experience in gathering Business requiremts through JAD sessions. I have successfully managed remote development teams of 12 people in the recent past as an onsite technical project leader. I am well versed in developing complex IBM mainframe applications using SDLC methodologies. I have several Years of experience working with CMM Level 5 Processes and performed process audits as an Internal software auditor.

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For the past twenty,I have been consistently exceeding the expectations of my clients and as a result achieved several awards. I am an organized, flexible individual, with a keen eye for details and I am able to back this up with references from my clients. On top of everything, I have a very positive attitude.

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I believe my analytical, technical, leadership skills are a strong match for this position. I thank you in advance for your consideration, and I look forward to hearing from you soon.
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developing test strategy- only one strategy?
As you will notice- As can be seen
requiremts- requirements
Years- lower case
Internal- lower case
past twenty,I have been consistently exceeding- past twenty years, I have consistently exceeded
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developing test strategy- only one strategy?
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As you will notice- As can be seen
requiremts- requirements
Years- lower case
Internal- lower case
past twenty,I have been consistently exceeding- past twenty years, I have consistently exceeded

Thank you for your reply. I apologize for the spelling and punctuation mistakes that could have been avoided had I paid little more attention to this.
1)
Next, I was wondering what is wrong with this statement --
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have been consistently exceeding
. My intention here is to convey that I did well in the past, doing well now and will do equally good in the future... --- Is my intention not conveyed through this statement?

2) Any general remarks on this covering letter ?
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1 It's not commonly used in the progressive form. It sounds better to me in the simple form and carries the same implication.
2 The writing's fine, but do you need so much detail in the cover, when there's also the resume?
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[quote=Tdol;119821]1 It's not commonly used in the progressive form. It sounds better to me in the simple form and carries the same implication.
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Thank you and I got you.

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2 The writing's fine, but do you need so much detail in the cover, when there's also the resume?
May be you are right.. I wanted to make sure that all the job requirements are covered in my covering letter. May be there is a way to condense the information, but I am just not able to.. This has been a challenge to me for a while and I am working on it..
Any suggestions towards improving my writing skills are highly welcome.
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I'd recommend keeping it short and give enough to get them to want to read the resume, which is more important.
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