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    Default Can someone kindly help me to correct and edit these sentences?

    Someone help me to check the following sentences?
    if there's any grammar mistake...

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    It's your 25th birthday,any plan for it?
    Im sorry that i cant celebrate for u again.
    But i believe that you will have a wonderful birthday.
    Anyway,i can just post you 2 birthday gifts here.
    They are a pen and a handkerchief with Winnie The Pooh pattern...
    I really hope that you will like them.
    Hope they will be useful to you too.

    It's a very ordinary pen,but i myself like it much.
    This handkerchief,i saw it during i was at night market.I bought it since i remember tat u like Winnie The Pooh.

    And this birthday card,seems for kid...
    it's cute,right?
    i was hardly to find this kinda card..hehe~

    My wishes for u...
    1.Happy everyday...
    2.May ur life full with happiness.
    3.All the best...

    AND HAPPY 25th BIRTHDAY!~

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    That's all..do u have any idea to make these sentences more beautiful?
    Millions of thanks

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    Default Re: Can someone kindly help me to correct and edit these sentences?

    Quote Originally Posted by ahfan_85 View Post
    Someone help me to check the following sentences?
    if there's any grammar mistake...
    >
    It's your 25th birthday! Have you any plans to celebrate?
    Im sorry that I cant be there to celebrate it with you, but I'm sure you will have a wonderful time!
    Anyway, I have posted you these two presents - one is a pen and the other a handkerchief with a Winnie The Pooh pattern...
    I really hope you like them and I hope they will be useful to you too.
    It's only an ordinary pen, but I like it. I bought the handkerchief during a visit to a night market, because I remembered that you like Winnie The Pooh.
    And this birthday card... well it's a bit childish, but cute, right?
    It was hard to find an appropriate card for you..hehe~
    My wishes for u...
    1. Be happy everyday...
    2. May youur life be full of happiness.
    3. All the best...
    AND HAPPY 25th BIRTHDAY!~

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    That's all..do u have any idea to make these sentences more beautiful?
    Millions of thanks
    Hope this helps, try a few little drawings and things to make it more fun!

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    ahfan_85 is offline Newbie
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    Default Re: Can someone kindly help me to correct and edit these sentences?

    Quote Originally Posted by curmudgeon View Post
    Hope this helps, try a few little drawings and things to make it more fun!
    thanks much

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