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Default Can someone kindly help me to correct and edit these sentences?

Someone help me to check the following sentences?
if there's any grammar mistake...

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It's your 25th birthday,any plan for it?
Im sorry that i cant celebrate for u again.
But i believe that you will have a wonderful birthday.
Anyway,i can just post you 2 birthday gifts here.
They are a pen and a handkerchief with Winnie The Pooh pattern...
I really hope that you will like them.
Hope they will be useful to you too.

It's a very ordinary pen,but i myself like it much.
This handkerchief,i saw it during i was at night market.I bought it since i remember tat u like Winnie The Pooh.

And this birthday card,seems for kid...
it's cute,right?
i was hardly to find this kinda card..hehe~

My wishes for u...
1.Happy everyday...
2.May ur life full with happiness.
3.All the best...

AND HAPPY 25th BIRTHDAY!~

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That's all..do u have any idea to make these sentences more beautiful?
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Someone help me to check the following sentences?
if there's any grammar mistake...
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It's your 25th birthday! Have you any plans to celebrate?
Im sorry that I cant be there to celebrate it with you, but I'm sure you will have a wonderful time!
Anyway, I have posted you these two presents - one is a pen and the other a handkerchief with a Winnie The Pooh pattern...
I really hope you like them and I hope they will be useful to you too.
It's only an ordinary pen, but I like it. I bought the handkerchief during a visit to a night market, because I remembered that you like Winnie The Pooh.
And this birthday card... well it's a bit childish, but cute, right?
It was hard to find an appropriate card for you..hehe~
My wishes for u...
1. Be happy everyday...
2. May youur life be full of happiness.
3. All the best...
AND HAPPY 25th BIRTHDAY!~

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Hope this helps, try a few little drawings and things to make it more fun!
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