Please check this promotional letter

[hookeba]

First, we would like to give our warm welcome and wishes of good health and prosperity to your esteemed company

In business, small and elegant gifts for customers or business associates work as a catalyst for tightening business relationships. Likewise, presents for employees at holidays shows their bosses' appreciation for the staff's contribution to the company

As a professional and seasoned wine and spirits purveyor in Indochinese market, we are pleased to introduce you a wide and diverse category of wine and spirits ranging from mainstream products to fast-drink cocktail and fizzy fruit juice, from world famous products to new and high quality ones at reasonable prices.

Enclosed you will find our quotation and a brochure of some products for the upcoming festival season. We always do our utmost to provide not only our excellent products but also our most thorough service to your company

We look forward to receiving your reply. If any enquiry, please contact…. We are pleased to send our representatives to assist you in person at official hours.

Best regards,



I tried to make this letter as formal as possible. Please check if there's anything else I should correct to make it more formal.

[RonBee]

Well, you could hardly have made the letter more formal.

However, maybe I can make a few suggestions that will be helpful.

Originally Posted by hookeba

First, we would like to give our warm welcome and wishes of good health and prosperity to your esteemed company

Try:

We would like to extend our warm welcome and wishes of good health and prosperity to everyone at (name of company).

Originally Posted by hookeba

In business, small and elegant gifts for customers or business associates work as a catalyst for tightening business relationships. Likewise, presents for employees at holidays shows their bosses' appreciation for the staff's contribution to the company

Try:

In business, small and elegant gifts for customers or business associates work as catalysts for tightening business relationships. Likewise, presents for employees at holiday time show their bosses' appreciation for the staff's contribution to the company

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Originally Posted by hookeba

As a professional and seasoned wine and spirits purveyor in Indochinese market, we are pleased to introduce you a wide and diverse category of wine and spirits ranging from mainstream products to fast-drink cocktail and fizzy fruit juice, from world famous products to new and high quality ones at reasonable prices.

Try:

As a professional and seasoned wine and spirits purveyor in the Indochinese market, we are pleased to introduce you to a wide and diverse category of wine and spirits ranging from mainstream products to fast-drink cocktail and fizzy fruit juice, from products already world famous to new and appealing high quality products at reasonable prices.

Originally Posted by hookeba

Enclosed you will find our quotation and a brochure of some products for the upcoming festival season. We always do our utmost to provide not only our excellent products but also our most thorough service to your company

We look forward to receiving your reply. If any enquiry, please contact…. We are pleased to send our representatives to assist you in person at official hours.

Best regards,

Perhaps:

Enclosed you will find our quotation and a brochure of some products for the upcoming festival season. We always do our utmost to provide not only our excellent products but also any assistance necessary.

We look forward to receiving your reply. If you have any questions, please contact…. We would be pleased to send our representatives to assist you in person.

Best regards,

What do you think?

[RonBee]

You could also say:

Wishing all the best to you and yours at (name of company).

~R

[hookeba]

Thanks, RonBee.

Your suggestions really helped.