Try:The successful mixture of business administration, foreign languages and on-the-job training has had an enormous influence on my past five years. My presentation skills, communication skills, personality development, and cultural understanding all received high ratings. I received an extensive general education and an interesting insight in the astonishing world of tourism.(I would prefer "had an enormous influence on me", but perhaps that is a quibble.)
Try:I often have had to take the initiative in the organisation and management of events, conventions, incentives and seminars. The experience that I got in some of the finest 5 star-hotels in Baden will stand me in good stead. In addition to the knowledge I gained through experience, I decided to improve my knowledge in this area with the Master´s programme “Tourism Management and Leisure Industry”."I often had" is past tense; "I often have had" relates more to the present.
Austria's cultural history
in the last five years
It might be better to say knowledge of foreign languages and cultures.
Try:I have set myself some goals for the next five years. The university will be completely satisfied with my achievements, and I will make a good showing. I am a highly educated student and I am convinced that I will meet the requirements of the IMC.(I have moved this one to the "Essay and Writing" folder.)
You mostly do a pretty good job with punctuation and paragraphs. :-D
As a highly motivated student, I will be able to display a lot of my positive traits. I am reliable, determined, single-minded and set great store by punctuality. I have a bent for languages, and I can put my knowledge to good use. I am a adventurous, creative person who can think out of the box, and I am not afraid of experimenting. I like facing challenges in joint action, but I also place a high value on independence. I have played on a soccer team for years and learned the importance of good teamwork. I am self-confident and my positive presence adds a special touch to my presentation skills. I am never dejected by mistakes because I put them down to experience and I always make the best of a bad bargain. I always bring my work in on schedule, and reliability and trust are of great importance to me.
five-year journey toward achieving a Master's degree.Say:
I am looking forward to comparing notes with students from different countries and cultures.Re:
and the great variety of different ideas will have a positive effect on the working conditions.That is unclear.
Besides my passionate interest in languages, I am a great one for sports and sports event management, and planning of sports facilities would be an interesting sphere of work. Art in all its forms has always been an world full of new ideas, ground-breaking thinking, tolerance and creativity. Taking part in the whole process of managing art would be an honourable and exciting job. Art and sports bring people together, but it's the perfect that makes it happen.What do you think?
What is HLA?