short passage

[kohyoongliat]

Could someone please edit this short passage for me. Thank you very much.

Alice has a baby sister. Her name is Sally. Sally is two months old. She cannot eat food because she has no teeth. She drinks milk from a bottle.
Alice loves her sister very much. She likes to play with her and see her smile.
Sally cries whenever she is hungry or thirsty. Alice will feed her with milk or water whenever her mother is busy.
Whenever her mother is busy, she puts Sally to bed.

[Anglika]

Each sentence is grammatically fine and the whole makes sense, but lacks fluency. How long have you been learning English?

[kohyoongliat]

This is model composition for students who have just started school. Could you please edit it to make it a better composition, please.
Thank you very much.

[wuwei]

Could someone please edit this short passage for me. Thank you very much.

Alice has a baby sister. Her name is Sally. Sally is two months old. She cannot eat food because she has no teeth. She drinks milk from a bottle.
Alice loves her sister very much. She likes to play with her and see her smile.
Sally cries whenever she is hungry or thirsty. Alice will feed her with milk or water whenever her mother is busy.
Whenever her mother is busy, she puts Sally to bed.

Hi, I am a beginner, too. Could you pls help to correct the adaptted one, thanks.
Alice has a two-month-old sister named Sally, Sally just can drink and can not eat some solid food, because she has no teech.Alice loves Sally so deeply, and often feed and play with her when Sally feel hungry or unhappy and her mother is busy.
Thanks

[kohyoongliat]

Dear Anglika

Could you oblige me by editing the short passage for me. Thank you very much.

[mykwyner]

I'll help you get started.

Alice has a two month old baby sister namend Sally. Sally cannot eat food because she has no teeth, so she drinks milk from a bottle.

This is a good exercise in creating compound and complex sentences in order to make your writing more interesting.