want someone to edit my short article

[taren]

· Using computers as a part of classroom teaching can consolidate what students learn from the lessons. Since teachers can upload their teaching materials to the Internet for students to download so that students won't miss any key points.

· The advantages of computers may not be benefited to some students who do not have computers. For this reason, these students cannot ensure that they haven't miss any key points.

· Firstly, painting is a hobby for people to relax and fun. It should be done in spare time instead of in the school curriculum.

Secondly, painting is a talent which cannot be taught. Therefore, it is a waste of time and money teaching it to most students.

Lastly, everyone has different views on the definition of good art. In other words, it cannot be graded fairly.

All in all, painting is just a hobby and it is a talent which cannot be taught. Moreover, it cannot be graded fairly. Therefore, painting should not be taught at school.

[Anglika]

Can you explain the relationship of the paragraphs on computers and their value to the paragraphs on painting?

[taren]

there is no relationship between each articles but l want someone to edit my articles.
can someonr help me?

[Anglika]

Thank you for explaining. It wasn't clear in your headline.

Article 1

· Using computers as a part of classroom teaching can consolidate what students learn from the lessons, because tachers can upload their teaching materials to the Internet for students to download so that students won't miss any key points.

· The advantages of computers is of no benefit to students who do not have computers. For this reason: these students cannot ensure that they haven't miss any key points.

Article 2

· Firstly, painting is a hobby to help people relax and have fun. It should be done in their spare time instead of in the school curriculum.

Secondly, painting is a talent which cannot be taught. Therefore, it is a waste of time and money teaching it to most students.

Lastly, everyone has different views on the definition of good art. In other words, it cannot be graded fairly.

All in all, painting is just a hobby and it is a talent which cannot be taught. Moreover, it cannot be graded fairly. Therefore, painting should not be taught at school.

[taren]

thank you very much!
where are you come from?
are you a teacher or student?
are you always have spare time to correct article from this forum?

[Ayuda-Tulong]

Originally Posted by taren

thank you very much!
where are you come from?
are you a teacher or student?
are you always have spare time to correct article from this forum?

Taren, ALL English sentences ALWAYS start with capital letters. There are NO exceptions to this basic rule.

Next, your final sentence should have read, "Do you always have spare time to correct articles . . . . "

[RonBee]

Anglika's editing was quite good, but he did miss something.

Say:

they haven't missed any key points

~R

[Anglika]

oops