Composition about why do people move to another country

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Please, correct this according to CAE's level

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When people move to another country, economical scene and the emotionally aspect need to be considered. It is a fact that many people move to a foreign country but there are also a LOT of people who do not since they are afraid they will not get accustomed to the culture.

The quality of jobs, higher wages, more job opportunities are decisive factors while people evaluate whether to go to another country. In several countries, workers are not legally registered and bosses make them work ten hours or twelve a day. They are exploited and do not have any right. A wider labour market is another crucial factor. Work elements play a vital role while people consider moving to another place.

On the other hand, some people argue they would not move to a foreign country since they do not want to leave their families which are the most important thing for them. There are not many people who can move themselves with the whole family so they would be alone in an unknown place. Despite they deny wanting to move to another country, they think they would be much more relax and comfortable in another country if they are living in a stressful one.

My conclusion is that different people have different reasons for moving to another place to live such as higher wages or more job opportunities but, even considering these factors, they would not move because of emotional aspect.

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When people move to another country, the economical scene and the emotional aspects of the transfer need to be considered. Although many people move to a foreign country, there are also many people who do not since they are afraid they will not get accustomed to the culture.

The quality of jobs and the availability of higher salaries and more job opportunities are decisive factors when people decide whether to go to another country. In several countries, workers are not legally registered and bosses force them to work ten hours or twelve a day. They are exploited and do not have any labor rights. A wider labour market is another crucial factor. (explain a little more, i.e. what you mean and how this is crucial) Work elements play a vital role while people consider moving to another place.

On the other hand, some people argue they would not move to a foreign country since they do not want to leave their families, which are the most important thing for them. There are few people who can move themselves with the whole family; most workers are alone in an unknown place. But even though they deny wanting to move to another country, they think they would be much more relaxed and comfortable in another country if they are living in a stressful one.

My conclusion is that different people have different reasons for moving to another place to live. These reasons include higher wages and more job opportunities. But even though the chances of getting a better job would be higher, many families will not move because of emotional aspect.

Is that the only mistake?

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I have just realised you corrected the text without marking my error. Could you do it so it is much clearer for me to see my mistakes?

I saw my mistakes, thanks ;)

Sorry I didn't mark them this time, I just got lazy. Usually I do it, and I'll keep doing it.

Thanks :)

No problem, I just told you that because it is ease for me to see my mistakes :) ( is this sentence right? )

No, not completely...
Did you mean to say the following: "No problem, I just told you that because it is easier for me to see my mistakes if you highlight them."?

Yes, I meant to say that.

Thanks!

Sure Pablo. :)