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Default A letter to the town council (FCE practice)

There is another topic for FCE.

You have just heard that the town council may build a new motorway in your area. The motorway would go through the middle of a large park, which would be destroyed.

Write a letter to the town council, opposing or supporting this plan.

Could you please correct any mistakes? Will this pass successfully?

Dear Sir/Madam,

I have just heard on TV about building a new motorway through the middle of the park “Green Hills” in the north of the city. I am strongly against this.

Firstly, the north part of the city is pollution-free area due to the park. If the park were not there, we would have a serious problem with air pollution, and people’s health would become worse.

Furthermore, a lot of people, especially teenagers, like to go cycling, jogging or playing football and other games there. If there were not the park they would not go anywhere, and it might have influence on an increase in amount of crimes.

Finally, many birds and animals, about 200 species, live there. Without the park we would not be able to save them alive.

I think the town council should do something about this immediately. Do any more readers feel the same way?

Yours faithfully,
Peter Petrov.

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Default Re: A letter to the town council (FCE practice)

Try to correct these:
about building a new motorway
is pollution-free area
to save them alive
Do any more readers feel the same way? (not the grammar- the context)


Improve these

If the park were not there
might have influence on an increase in amount of crimes
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Try to correct these:
about building a new motorway
is pollution-free area
to save them alive
Do any more readers feel the same way? (not the grammar- the context)


Improve these

If the park were not there
might have influence on an increase in amount of crimes
Thank you very much for your help. I've revised the letter according to your advice. Could you please check this?


Dear Sir/Madam,

I have just heard on TV about the construction of a new motorway through the middle of the park “Green Hills” in the north of the city. I am strongly against this.

Firstly, the north part of the city is an ecologically clean area due to the park. If there were not the park, we would have a serious problem with air pollution, and people’s health would become worse.

Furthermore, a lot of people, especially teenagers, like to go cycling, jogging or playing football and other games there. If there were not the park, they would not go anywhere, and there would be an increase in amount of crimes.

Finally, many birds and animals, about 200 species, live there. Without the park we would not be able to protect them from disappearance.

I think the town council should do something about this immediately. I am sure that many readers will support my idea.

Yours faithfully,
Peter Petrov.
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Default Re: A letter to the town council (FCE practice)

If there were not the park- I would say something like 'If the park were built over'
amount of crimes- either 'number of crimes' or 'amount of crime'
many readers- I thought this was a letter to the council, not a newspaper
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