plz check now plz Anglika

[ghai_prince13]

20.3 Write brief message on how you spend your free time?
I
spend my time outside whenever possible. It is more interesting and relaxing than staying at home. Being outside gives me the oppurnity to see sights, try new things and meet new people, to go cinema, to theatre, to live concert. When I am outside, I have the oppurnity to see new sights, go to parks, go swimming, and take a hike in a new place. The flowers change with season to see them there beauty .if I ‘m at home I like to read books and play computer games and watch movies on net.

[lmontdewalt]

I checked this for you.


20.3 Write brief message on how you spend your free time?
I
spend my time outside whenever possible. It is more interesting and relaxing than staying at home. Being outside gives me the oppurnity to see sights, try new things and meet new people, to go to the cinema, to the theatre,and to live concerts. When I am outside, I have the oppurnity to see new sights, go to parks, go swimming, and take a hike in a new place. The flowers change with the seasons and I enjoy seeing their beauty . If I ‘m at home I like to read books and play computer games and watch movies on the internet.

(you have 'new sights' on there 2 times. You may want to take one out)

[ghai_prince13]

thanks

[Anglika]

20.3 Write brief message on how you spend your free time?
I
spend my time outside whenever possible. It is more interesting and relaxing than staying at home. Being outside gives me the oppurnity to see sights, try new things and meet new people, to go cinema, to theatre, to live concert. When I am outside, I have the oppurnity to see new sights, go to parks, go swimming, and take a hike in a new place. The flowers change with season to see them there beauty .if I ‘m at home I like to read books and play computer games and watch movies on net.

Better - but you are repeating yourself.

"to go to the cinema,to the theatre or to live concerts"